page 1: best page imo, which kind of proves my point that the sexier it gets the worse it gets, but maybe this is just my own kinks being exposed. it's funny how link is a boring void of a character that things Just Happen To even in furry porn. wish he was better characterized. fox is sweet and cute. hearts are a nice touch.

page 2: i like the action of the upper three panels but i’m not convinced on the lower half, especially the bit on the right. i know it's setting up the next page but i think it might be unnecessary. i think a tall panel showing fox sinking down on the dick might have been interesting in that space instead.

page 3: the dogs being interested in butts joke is cute. not sure if it was intentional; they could have leaned into it a bit more. NOT sold by the emphasis on deepthroating at the bottom, like, given the context, fox looks STUCK?? i would have liked to see more motion here instead of the cheap aheago shot.

page 4: i like the top-right panel here; it has good motion. i think the rest of it is too mechanistic. like, if fox winds up on link's dick it's pretty obvious how he got there right?? you don't NEED the closeup on the action there for the reader to understand what happened?? so i think instead of this sequence i would have preferred something which was more sensual and less explicit. i also think the looks from link which try to show, like, softness, are ineffectual because unlike fox, link is a nobody character i care nothing about. could just replace him with an outline tbh.

page 5: same basic issue. this is trying to show motion but i think it's failing due to an attempt to be Extremely Explicit. like what is with that dead straight-on angle in the bottom right?? couldn't you give them, like, a little bit of dimension??

page 6: yes more interesting angles!! this is a pretty good page if i ignore the fact that i don't care about link. you have the same problem as with the deepthroating though where the author is Committed to portraying link Buried To The Hilt and that's preventing them from like… showing good motion. the sound effects don't cut it. the precum flinging off of fox’s dick was a nice touch. go away link i don't want to see your face

page 7/end: i think the cross-section cum shot is made really ineffectual by showing zero motion and being broken across two pages. also it's just visually, like, kind of phoned in. fox cumming is cute. again absolutely zero evidence of motion except for sound effects are you humping him or not!! upset we don't get to see link's cock again